Hello!

It's nice to be given the chance to review some of your work for the MHWA challenge.

This poem was a little more abstract that a lot of the pieces that I've read so far, but I like that you have to really look at it for the meaning, and that it's more open to interpretation. While the big picture is easy to lose track of in all the chaos, there's a nice flow to the piece that keeps you jumping from one line to the next.

There was one line in particular that really stuck out at me:





This has the rare tone combination of having a lot of action while also being very ominous, and was without a doubt my favorite part of the poem.

I also like a little later on in the poem how you changed the font size to really emphasize the motion your words were making. It was a creative, extra step in the process that made the experience a bit deeper for the reader.

All in all this was a great read - there weren't any suggestions that I would make for it, other than that you just keep writing!

All the best,

Cat


















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .