Hello!

Thanks for submitting this for our MHWA Review Challenge, it was interesting to see a monologue in there after reading/reviewing so many poems first. The scientific theory you mentioned was interesting, and I think it's great you included a link so that people could see the source and read more if they felt so inclined.

I do have a couple suggestions if you're interested:

The first would be that you address early on the intention of the piece. I thought it was going to keep the scientific tone you started with, but I think I actually may have been more interested in reading it if I had known that it was going to be a more personalized account.

The second would be that you touch back a little on the original theme of eating breakfast together being healthy in the middle. It spiraled out a bit before coming back around. You made a lot of good points about Breakfast, and a lot of good points about Body positivity, but I think your points may have come across more clearly if there had been less work on the reader's part to connect the dots.

That being said, it's obvious that you have a lot of strong feelings about this, and I think it's great you were able to open up and get so personal about it. Body positivity is something that should be addressed more openly, and reading personal accounts like this always just reinforces my resolve to do what little bit I can to actualize societal change. For that reason, along with many others, I'm glad to have read this.

Thanks again for sharing it, and I hope I get to read some more of your work throughout the month (and in general!

Sincerely,

Cat




















My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .