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         Good morning, adamgill , and welcome to WdC! I'll be your reviewer this morning, so a few words about myself might be in order. My real name is Jack Tyler, "Blimprider" being a nod to my work in steampunk. I am published, though hardly famous, nor am I a highly-respected critic. I am a guy with an opinion that I'm going to share, and if you disagree with anything I say here, keep firmly in mind that the only opinion that matters here is yours. I use a reviewing template in which I explain my views on the most important aspects of writing, then hold your work alongside to offer my opinions on how you did. Remember, I am no kind of authority; these are my opinions.

         So with that out of the way, let me say that I tend to shy away from poetry, though I will look at it when it appears on the Newbie list, and it occasionally speaks to me, as this one did. Poetry is often deep and convoluted, and I oft times don't get the subtle nuances it uses to make its points, but you were quite clear in this one, and make no mistake, it is delightful! I understand from your intro that this is already published, so there's no point in pointing out nitpicks, as you couldn't fix them if you wanted to; I'll just get right to it, then.
         THEME: I usually review prose, and comment on a whole list of aspects, characters, settings, and all that jazz. With poetry I only recognize two aspects, what does it say, and how is it written? The theme speaks to me like it was written with me in mind! While I enjoyed writing stories from an early age, I believe upon reflection that the single most boring thing I had to do during all my years of public education was diagramming sentences. I mean, who in God's name had the time to dream up anything that asinine? Had to somebody doing life in solitary! Learning the names of all the conjunctions and participles was a close second in the quest to drive me away from my written language... I just want to write, already!
         And then along comes this delightful poem to explain to me all the fascinating things I missed by studiously ignoring all this stuff. That is an amazing accomplishment, Mr. Gill, and I tip my begoggled patrol cap to you for pulling it off!
         PRESENTATION: This covers the way the poem flows as well as the nuts and bolts items like typos and misspellings. I enjoyed the rhythm, the "music" of the verses that so much modern "poetry" lacks, and as one might expect from a published work, I could find no typos at all. Not much to say here beyond a heartfelt well-done! I just wanted to swing by and let you know that your work is appreciated and immensely enjoyed. It was a great start to my day!

         I see from your bio that you're in your early 50s, so even though I'm 70, I won't try to pass along any helpful "tips for newbies." I'll just wish you all the success you could ask for on your writing journey, whatever you consider success to be.

Read well, and write better!
*Hotair2* Jack "Blimprider" Tyler *Hotair2*

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