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Review #4485028
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 strangers  [E]
are you afraid of meeting someone new?
by dark_world
Review of strangers  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi dark_world,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about meeting new people and what we anticipate about meeting new people in our lives. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across a couple of structural issues which need your attention:

1)You have neglected to begin sentences with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

2)You have neglected to use an apostrophe in contractions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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