Hello 💙 Carly

My name is Dawn and I'll be reviewing your item in connection with "I Write in 2019"  [E]. These are just my thoughts and forgive me if I ramble. Thank you for sharing your writing.


Initial Thoughts: It's a nice little poem with form and rhyme that focuses on showing a view based in particular on the title. Easy enough for different readers to appreciate. Though is more of a quick picture and has a little bit of a feeling like it doesn't go anywhere in particular, which can be okay at times when it comes to poetry.


Contest and Prompt: The contest is fairly open. The main difference is that they limit number of entries each round but there isn't a prompt that must be followed. Makes it easy enough then to fit the requirements of a form poem that shows off meter and rhyme with a challenge coming in narrowing the options down in order to create something. Will be a tough one for the judges and in the frame of competition.


Form: The form is a nice choice in providing a way to create rhythm in this poem within the line requirements and the rhyming. It does have a little risk with the repetition at the end of every single line that might detract from the overall feel or make it seem a little monotonous. Some may like that element more than others. The form itself does allow a little freedom since it requires rhyme but allows the poet to pick the scheme for it. It does appear, according to the note with the information about the prompt that you follow what the form requires.


Favorite Part:
Ancient night settles down so fair
Throughout the forest's frosty air.


Final Notes: Overall, nice work in creating the poem. You did a good job with this pleasant bit of poetry.

With the little note at the bottom, I do have a bit of a suggestion. I appreciate that you put information about the form there. It is very helpful because not everyone is going to want to research to find out more information on the form and saves the judge, or anyone who is going to review with a focus on that element, a little time too. Interesting that you put some other rhyme words at the bottom though I don't quite know the reasoning there. However, with the drop note name being the contest, I would have liked to see a little bit of information about the contest being entered or maybe a link. Either that or change the title of the drop note so it reflects what is found within it better.


Good luck with the contest and the continued challenge of taking part in I Write. Keep writing!






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .