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Bon jour, Dalimer!
This is another cool piece, and again I like how your imagination works. I’ll be honest though; I was kind of surprised to see Thomas become the sacrificial lamb to the power plant. Call me old fashioned or whatnot, but I’ve always had a problem with ‘authority’, so I was sort of rooting for Thomas. But that wouldn’t have worked for this unless you threw a spin into it.
Still, it worked out just fine. And if that’s what they have to do to keep our electricity running, then so be it. *Smirk2*
Great job using those prompt words, but being the grammar Nazi I am, I did spot one tiny niggle in the last line:
‘...the sacrificial offering that has been made’ (had)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, and have a really far out day!

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