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Guten tag, Linn Browning!
This is neat! I like the concept of this clerk being able to take her thoughts, whether good or bad, from her. And leaving her with no recollection what happened was a cool way to end it. And it didn't even cost her a cent!
This gives me an idea, but I'm sure it's already been used. But you can't put a copyright on an idea! *Bigsmile*
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot one tiny comma niggle:
'The silver needed polishing(,) but otherwise(,) it was perfect.' (it should be behind 'polishing', not 'otherwise')
I'm really surprised this didn't win!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Linn! Thanks for sharing this, and have a fantastic day/evening/tomorrow!

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