Hi Taylor,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word to find out more. You have written about a peaceful, gorgeous place in California which lost became ruined because of development in the area. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)Trouble started in early nineteen hundreds when the canal used for diverting the river became clogged with silt and a second canal was hastily built and again the same problem but on to a third canal all resulting in the overflow of the Colorado.
This time period was one of the wettest on record and the river opened up her banks and flooded the entire area. It wasn’t until 1907 that the tide and flow of this river was finally stemmed.-These are two separate paragraphs and need to be double spaced.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.