Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Greetings, Leadwood! This is pretty good for one of your first pieces on here, and always being one to root for the underdog, I like how Calvin stood up for himself, even if he did have to resort to using a weapon. Sadly though, that's the only way bullies can be dealt with these days. Great spelling and telling, and nice use of the prompt words. I used to enter The Daily FF Contest a lot years ago (even won a few times! ), so I know how hard it is to get a complete (and decent) story in using so few words. But you seem to have it down pat! One tiny niggle: "Hey(,) look who I found," By the way, I noticed you've been entering this contest by typing your stories directly into the posts. That's fine with this particular contest, but most other contests require you to use the Bitem format, which a lot of Newbies don't know how to use. Here's a link that will show you how post Bitem links for your stories should you decide to enter other contests:
It also allows you to practice doing them there! Oh, and one more thing: you might consider double spacing your paragraphs so it's easier to read, but that's just my opinion. Kee ponw ritin gon, Leadwood, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.
PSSS-If you want more exposure for your items you can put them on the Please Review Page or The Shameless Plug Page under Community on the left hand side.
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