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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Greetings, Paul D!
This isn't bad.
Oh, wait. I just realized as I started writing this review what you did with that prompt! A house 'sitter'! Wow! I'm seriously impressed that you would take the prompt so literally! *Laugh*
Bravo, my friend!
I think this is the first story in "SCREAMS!!!"  I've seen that dealt with giants, and I love how you used the prompt! But what I also liked was the Giant's abhorrence to those encroaching 'foreigners'. I used to work in the woods, but at the same time I also cherished the beauty and tranquility of Nature, so I can totally understand the giant's feelings!
The only thing I can say about this is I would have liked to see Ivan crushed under the giant's foot since you still had 21 words to use, but I guess that was implied enough, huh?
One tiny niggle:
'He tried the reconcile the sound with other sounds he'd heard in the past' ('to'-also I don't think reconcile is the word you're looking for here-maybe 'connect' or 'associate'?)
Otherwise, well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and...
CONGRATULATIONS ON THIS BEING THE WEEKLY WINNER OF "SCREAMS!!!"  FOR THE WEEK OF JUNE 9TH TO JUNE 16TH!

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