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Given: Jul 11, 2019 at 3:40pm
Length: 856 Characters |
706 w/o WritingML
Ahoy, Mari! This isn't bad, and it's certainly very graphic and vivid! You're descriptions of the maggots and how she succumbed to that vile and terrible demise was very well done! I guess Helen's relationship with her ghosts wasn't a good as it should have been, especially since they ended up getting the last laugh! Great spelling and grammar, but I did spot one tiny niggle (sorry to be so picky!):
'...she took the cellophane off the steak(,) and threw the meat into the pan.' Also, there seemed to be a bit more telling than showing in this. Otherwise, nice job! Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! 'Twas a pleasure to read, and have a wonderful day/evening/tomorrow!
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