Ahoy, Lassie! This is cool. I like the sci/fi style of it, as well as the human element you gave to these 'alligator people' with their compassion for their chemically mutated grandchild (yeah, I know the whole family was mutated, I'm just sayin'...) I think this has the makings of a much longer story if you wanted to go with it! Seriously! Nice use of the prompt phrase, too! A couple of tiny niggles: 'She rubbed her head briefly(,) glancing in the direction they just came from.' 'They stood staring(,) down at the smaller version of the creature.' (don't need that comma) Otherwise, well done! Kee ponw ritin gon, Lassie! Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful day!
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