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Mouse Code  [E]
No one escapes the rat race
by Ned
Review of Mouse Code  
Review by Angus
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Guten tag, Nordic Noir!
This is pretty good for a flash fiction piece.
One thing I enjoy about reading these FF contest entries is seeing how far people will think outside of the box with Arakun the Twisted Raccoon’s prompts, and you certainly thought outside of the box with this one.
Rat #6725 is apparently smarter than your average rat, but I think Sebastian was onto something with his suggestion that it might have an AC/DC song stuck in his head. After all, Angus rules! *Bigsmile*
Seriously though, you did a good job with this prompt. I guess even rats can get bored doing the same damn thing over and over again!
Sorry to be so picky, but I did spot one tiny niggle (grammar is a big pet peeve of mine—I even caught a quotation niggle in a R.L. Stine book the other day!):
(“)Like what kind of cheese he wants for dinner?”
By the way, when I first joined WdC, I actually managed to get one of my stories for this contest published. It’s "Invalid Item"  if you want to check it out.
Keeponwritingon, Nordic! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, and have a really gnarly day!

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