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Ahoy, Leadwood!
I wasn't sure if I was going to like this or not at first, considering what this scumbag was doing to his wife. But I figured it couldn't end that way, and thankfully I was right!
For a quick FF, I thought it was cool that the wife got her revenge in such a pleasing manner. Serving her hubbie his favorite meal from his favorite restaurant was sweet, even if she did add a secret ingredient to it! *Laugh*
There's a few speech tag niggles in this. When describing a speaker with a pronoun (such as he or she), the pronoun shouldn't be capitalized since it's still considered part of the sentence. Unless the pronoun is 'I'.
Examples:
"What is this crap?" He added. (he)
"What's for dinner?" He asked(.) (he)
You didn't do this on all the sentences, but I just wanted to point that out.
Otherwise, well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, and have a great day!

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