Hi Leadwood,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is starts with jubilation and ends with anxiety and worry. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the woman in the story will get her daughter back unharmed. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a woman who realizes her daughter has been kidnapped. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed an believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.