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With Passion and Haste  [13+]
A story poem of two boys and a tree.
by Whitemorn
Review by Mina~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi!

I like this story poem. The narrative is great that makes me reading it to the end.. I could imagine where they are. You paints a nice picture of nature and the two boys Eric and Derek.

I admire the sound words choice (onomatopoeia )and the images you have used here.
“CRACK, then again, like the strike of a snake,
the old oak shed a branch from it's top,
while warning the boys with the sound of its break,
before hitting them both with a PLOP!”

In conclusion, it is a very good poem . The tone is quiet and very melodic.

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