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This is a micro-review for poetry written by Lostwordsmith for the poem "Invalid Item"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - Spring - and capturing its essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short form poetry and this is a very nice example of it. A nicely crafted Lady’s Slipper that is short, concise and succinct. Near perfect form. Check the meter in line three. It is slightly off. Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through the sense of sight (observation). You paint a picture of Spring that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. The rhythm for this form calls for iambic trimeter. There’s a slight bobble in line three. Good use of descriptive/comparison. Rhyming is good — internal rhyme that is perfect masculine rhyme which is executed with precision in this piece. Good depth of feeling. There is a sense of awakening Spring as winter wanes; a subtle joyfulness of the new season that I can relate to. Word choice is good as is the assonance. Nice consonance. No spelling errors found.

**Overall**

This is a very nice write and attempt at the Lady’s Slipper form. Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

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