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 Horror Movie  [E]
When Mutt, Luther, and Pete go see a special feature they are in for more than a movie...
by Devon Queer
Review of Horror Movie  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Devon!
As a lover/reader/writer and judge of horror on this site ("SCREAMS!!!" ), it’s not often that I see a story on here that piques my interest right from the get-go, but for some the reason this one did.
First off, you did a great job of telling this short tale of terror, and the idea of these wolves jumping out of a movie screen and attacking the audience was really unique. What’s more is you added the 3D glasses, which was the perfect addition to make the story (and the wolves) more realistic/believable/whatever. The invisibility things was also a nice touch, even though it might have downplayed the believability factor a tad.
Some people could have ended the story right there with the bloody massacre (myself included, sadly *Sad*), but you let your characters escape and gave a reason for the attack: these virtual creatures having to be fed every month was not just clever and imaginative, but also ingenious!
BRAVO!
To put it bluntly, I’m jealous! I wish I could have come up with this idea!
But here’s my question: why you didn’t finish this?!? You can’t just leave it like this! To paraphrase Mutt, you’re going to have to think of something! This is an excellent hook for a much longer piece, and I’d love to see where you go with it.
Please don’t leave me hanging!
The spelling and grammar was flawless (thank you!), and the whole piece read smoothly. My only suggestion would be to double space the paragraphs to make it easier to read.
A couple of comments:
‘I can see Mutt and Luther trying to haul the invisible wolf off of me, and eventually they succeed, and the wolf scrambles on to the next person.’ (How do you know the wolf scrambled on to the next person if it’s invisible—I’m not trying to be picky—just making a point)
Next sentence: ‘...pushing our (way) through it and stumbling out into the night.’ (No biggie—I’ve left words out plenty of times myself! Sometime my mind sees the word when it’s not really there, no matter how many times I read it!)
Also, you might want to put this in a larger font and double space the paragraphs to make it easier to read.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! PLEASE!
PS-I'm sure you already know this, but you might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.

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