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This is a micro-review for poetry written by 𝔹𝕝𝕦𝕖𝕪𝕖𝕫 for the poem "Invalid Item"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - being unseen - while at the same time capturing your poem’s essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nice use of alliteration in your title. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. A good write about how you feel about yourself, seeming to be invisible to everything/everyone around you. Well crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic devices. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) in your point of view. You paint a vivid picture on how you see yourself and what life throws at you that any reader can relate to and see in their mind’s eye.
Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Nice use of metaphor. Good use of descriptive/comparison. Rhyming is nicely done; a mixture of slant and perfect rhyme. Nice use of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme.

Deep expression of emotion; heartfelt and introspective. You express feelings of distress, powerlessness and helplessness in your life that seems grey, with no light at the end of the tunnel.
Word choice is good as is the use of alliteration, nice assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found.
I especially like the following lines:
“layers of me disintegrate
with every slam into the ground.” — this is a powerful image expressing loss of parts of yourself... deeply expressed feelings which you articulate throughout your poem.

**Overall**

A good write on a difficult time in your life that is expressed in a powerful way. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

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