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This is a micro-review for poetry written by murphyco for the poem "Invalid Item"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - dealing with confusion of our times - while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. Nicely done.
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love short form poetry and this is an excellent example of it. A very good write about making room for something when there’s little, if any, space left for it. A skillfully crafted Triolet which is short, concise and succinct which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a picture of a woman who wears many hats during any given day and the little room she has left is needed for hope to get done what needs to be done. This is a picture of being pulled in many directions that any reader can relate to. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm and pacing. Well executed iambic tetrameter. Nicely done. Good use of descriptive/comparison. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Good depth of feeling; one can sense the stress of the day, the conflict that may cause confusion. It’s almost like having a split personality; yet there is also determination, which holds a glimmer of hope that I can understand and relate to. Good word choice; your repeating lines are very effective. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance. No spelling errors found.
I especially like the following lines:
“For ire and fear to find domain.
It’s hope I must accommodate.” - I really like these two lines. It hopeful... depending upon hope to get through difficult times. I know how that feels.

**Overall**

This is a very good write. You say much in a few words and your message is clear. It kept my attention from the beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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