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 The Golden Rule  [E]
A children's poem about treating others as you'd like to be treated.
by Tim Chiu
Review of The Golden Rule  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a micro-review for poetry written by Tim Chiu for the poem "The Golden Rule"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - how children should treat each other - while at the same time capturing the essence of it as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. A very good write and message. Skillfully crafted rhyming quatrains that I really enjoy.

Imagery and descriptives are good. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of how children should treat each other on a daily basis that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment. Good pacing. Rhyming is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme.

Lovely depth of feeling. Earnest. A beautiful teaching moment for readers of all ages. Encouraging and inspiring. There is certainty in this wisdom that I relate to. Well spoken.

Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, consonance with good assonance. No spelling errors found.
I especially like the following lines:
“Treat folks like you would be treated,
Then you'll never be defeated. ” — these are wise words to live by... this is good advice for everyday living. Effective.

**Overall**

This is a very good write and message. It is helpful and full of wisdom. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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