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Stallion  [E]
The power of life that stirs the inner self.
by Jatog the Green
Review of Stallion  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a micro-review for poetry written by Jatog the Green for the poem "Stallion"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A very good title that is suitable to the subject to your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - one’s innate nature - while at the same time capturing your poem’s essence as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love this. It is a beautiful write that teaches one about themselves in life— through God’s creation. Skillfully crafted Free Verse which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. God use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of “the magnificence of life” God had given us as seen through nature that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good rhythm, pacing and use of enjambment. I love your metaphor - “Authority is stallion” and “nature breeds storms” nice use of personification. Good use of descriptive/comparison. Rhyme is not applicable in this piece.

Deep expression of emotion. Heartfelt and introspective. Thought provoking about the power of ones inner self. A beautiful message about life that we can see through nature. Earnest, encouraging and inspiring with a subtle sense of fascination. Deep thoughts that touch the heart.

Word choice is very good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good use of alliteration and consonance with strong assonance. No spelling errors found.
I especially like the following lines that sums up what life is:
“Still, such composition
of equine might
is symphony and
exclamation--it is
reason to relieve us
from our soft breathing.” — Simply beautiful... powerful. Lyrical. Yes, it is the music of life. (I love this metaphor.) Well done.

**Overall**

A beautiful write, thought provoking and touches the heart. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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