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This is a micro-review for poetry written by Princess Megan Rose 22 Years for the poem "Invalid Item"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

This is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - everlasting love - while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal inviting readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I love form poetry and if it’s rhyming, that is even better. A good write and message about forever love. A very nice attempt at a Kyrielle Sonnet. Check the meter of this form. Each line should be eight syllables.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation). Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of a love that is strong and undying that any reader can appreciate and relate to.

Flow is good as is the line to lie transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and pacing. Nice use of descriptive/comparison. Rhyming is nicely done as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece. Nice internal rhyme.

Deep expression of emotion. There is certainty in this special love that permeates your poem. I like the tender devotion you express about this all consuming love. Passionate, comforting and touching. Well done.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition as well as the excellent repeating lines that gives emphasis to your thoughts and feelings. Nice use of alliteration, assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. I think there is a typo in line seven, should be “good-bye”. Punctuation: just a suggestion, at the end of line two change the comma to a semi-colon, at the end of line five remove the comma, at the end of line six change the comma to a semi-colon and at the end of line ten change the comma to a semi-colon. This will give emphasis to each thought and will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.
I especially like the following lines:
“Rainbow colors add to the beauty of our love,
As we soar way up above,
We will never have to say good bye,
I know our love will never die.” — Simply beautiful; I love the ‘coloring’ of your words in defining this special love. Well done.

**Overall**

This is a lovely poem. I love the romance of it; its warmth which is expressed beautifully in this piece. It kept my attention from the beginning to end. Nicely crafted and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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