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This is a micro-review for poetry written by struggle2bherd for the poem "Invalid Item"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - where happiness lies - while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal that invites readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. This is very good write and message that is uplifting and encouraging. Well crafted rhyming quatrains which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice use of color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of where happiness can be found that any reader can appreciate and relate to.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and pacing; nice use of enjambment. Nice metaphor and use of simile. Good descriptive comparison. Rhyming is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second and fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed beautifully in this piece.

Lovely depth of feeling; earnest. I like the wisdom of your words. It is good, heartfelt advice. It’s an encouraging and reassuring message for all of us... a well expressed teaching moment that any reader can relate to and understand.

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of alliteration, assonance with good consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to each change in thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.
I especially like the following lines:
“That you can find happiness
But happiness will not find you” — this is so true and something all of need to learn. We have to look within ourselves to find happiness, and as you express later in the poem, that it has never left us, so we need to seek it which is excellent advice.

**Overall**

This is a very good write as well as good counsel. It is something we can act upon, on our own. It kept my attention throughout the piece. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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