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 As the tide goes out  [E]
Connecting with the sea and worries washing away
by SarraB
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a micro-review for poetry written by SarraB for the poem "As the tide goes out"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme’s intent - peace found at the sea - while at the same time captures the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. A beautiful, calming write about being at peace by the sea. Good utilization of the first person narrative. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of color and shade in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and the sense of touch. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of how the sea calms your spirit as it washes away your worries that any reader can appreciate, relate to and see in their mind’s eye.

Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm, pacing and enjambment.
Good use of descriptive/comparison.
Rhyming is not applicable in this piece.

Lovely depth of feeling. Heartfelt and introspective. The peacefulness and calm permeates this piece from beginning to end. I like the sense of contentment and ease of spirit that is described so beautifully in this piece. Nicely done.

Word choice is good. I love your use of repeating lines in each verse. It gives emphasis to your feelings. Nice use of alliteration in line fourteen. Nice use of consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses (change in thought) will give emphasis to it as well as make the rhythm and flow even better in my opinion.
I especially like the following lines:
“As the tide goes out
My worries wash away
Peace washes over me” — for me these lines sums up how powerful the sea can be as a calming influence that you express throughout your poem. Well done.

**Overall**

I love the peacefulness, calmness and meditative feelings I get when reading this poem. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

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