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 The Morning Light  [E]
Words from someone special leads to a fantasy.
by Zelda
Review of The Morning Light  
Review by the Wordy Jay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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~ the Wordy Jay ~


Hello, Zelda!

*BalloonR*    WELCOME TO WDC FROM THE "Newbie Welcome Wagon"  *BalloonR*

You captured the romantic fancies of an infatuated teenage girl (I think) beautifully in this poem. The setting was perfect, and I can imagine your character lounging lazily in the morning sun, enraptured by the poetic verses sent over her phone.

Good job portraying the irrational sentiments of a "love-stricken" teen. The fact that your character wasn't the subject of her crush's inspiration did little to diminish her desire and admiration for him. On the contrary, she relishes his "creative genius" and daydreams about being his muse one day. Oh, how passion triumphs over reason!


These two verses were my favourite:

*Clip* Thoughts of you . . . leaving me in tangles.

*Clip* . . . as your gaze slowly suffocates me.


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