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The Utopian Misery  [E]
At some point, we all have wished our lives were perfect, right? Well, wish again...
by Xiea
Review by the Wordy Jay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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~ the Wordy Jay ~


Hello, Xiea!

*BalloonR*    WELCOME TO WDC FROM THE "Newbie Welcome Wagon"  *BalloonR*

That's an interesting point of view you have there, and although not everyone shares that particular philosophy, it's one that I couldn't agree with more. *ThumbsUpL* "Trouble" is the "spice" of life, without which, there will be no enemy to overcome, no reason to innovate, and, certainly, no heights to aspire to.


Your paradoxical title does a good job of summing up the conflict presented in your poem: a "warning" of sorts that ushering in a Utopian state might actually prove to be more of a curse than a blessing to mankind.

My favourite expression:
With no dusk, just a perennial dawn.


The poem has a nice rhythm to it, and I like your rhyme scheme — even though you weren't subscribing to any particular format. I also like how you ended the poem by making the case for using life's challenges as stepping stones towards true happiness.

However, as much as I appreciate the motivating tone and message at the end, the lack of rhyme and rhythm in the final stanza kind of disturbed the general flow which somewhat spoiled the ending, in my opinion. *Smile*


Other than that little "glitch", this was a lovely poem, and I enjoyed reading it.


HAPPY WRITING!
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