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 Death Came Knocking  [E]
A humorous rhyme about a visit from the angel of death.
by Scott Steven
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a review for poetry written by Scott Steven for the poem "Death Came Knocking"  for the group "The WDC Angel Army" . Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Title**:
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of your theme’s intent - a conversation with the grim reaper - while at the same time capturing the essence of your poem as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it.

**First Impression**: For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I’m partial to short poetry and rhyme in particular. This is a very good write about a conversation that is short, concise and succinct. It continues the connection expressed in your title’s theme which is followed through to the end of your poem. Nicely done. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

**Imagery**:
Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good use of poetic device. Good color and shading in your wording that promotes and evokes emotion through sight (observation) and sound (hearing/understanding). Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of your ‘visit’ with Death that any reader can relate to and see in their mind’s eye.
Metaphor/Personification/Simile: Good use of personification of ‘Death’. Well expressed descriptive/comparison which complements your theme beautifully in this piece.

**Flow/Rhythm/Tone**:
Flow is good as is the line to line transition. Very good rhythm and pacing. It gives a lyrical feel to your poem. It sounds beautiful when read out loud. Lovely depth of feeling. I like the humor in this piece. Clever word play; Hospitable. I like the sense of playfulness in this ‘unique’ conversation. Well done.

**Rhyme**:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Your meter is tight. Good job.

**Word Choice**:
Word choice is good; I like the tongue in cheek moment “You looked like Death.” - well played. Nice use of alliteration, good assonance and consonance. Nice use of dialogue.
I especially like the following lines: there are so many, but I think these are my favorite—
““Why ever did you let me in? Most folks keep me at bay."
I looked him in his hollow eyes to leave in him no doubt,
"You looked like Death." I told him flat. We laughed as he walked out.” — this was for me a perfect ending to the conversation (deadpan humor). I love it.

**Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation**:
No spelling errors found. Grammar and punctuation are fine.

**Closing Thoughts**:
Overall, this is a very good write and an entertaining piece. It kept my attention from beginning to end. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!


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