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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Bon jour, Paul!
I’m reviewing this as a "The WDC Angel Army"  Angel and to thank you for all the reviews you do on this site!
Trippy. This world needs more witches! *Witch*
Seriously though, I like how you used this prompt. You didn’t go for the conventional horror style, but it was still pretty good. Being the mother of young witch who’s not in full command of her powers wouldn’t be an easy task, especially when said youngster is already inappropriately displaying her powers by flying around outside where humans might see! *Laugh*
But punishing the poor child by making her watch The McLaughin Report? Good Lord! That’s just cruel! *Rolling*
Great spelling and grammar, and the dialogue was perfect.
One tiny niggle:
"I know(,) Linda, you're a big girl now.”
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul! It’s good to see you around "SCREAMS!!!"  again, and have a great day!

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