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 Enlightenment  [13+]
A brief story about enlightenment. Third place in Tweet Me a Story Contest Round 96.
by Beholden
Review of Enlightenment  
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t is less blessed to edit than to conceive. Onward to darn-ation!

The son of Melqart pondered fresh enlightenment. He sat in
lotus among the poppies and thought on a tin woodsman.

         Too subtle, by more than half. Let me count the ways.
         One: Google "lotus flower meaning". Read: "The Lotus flower is regarded in many different cultures, especially in eastern religions, as a symbol of purity, enlightenment, self-regeneration and rebirth. Its characteristics are a perfect analogy for the human condition: even when its roots are in the dirtiest waters, the Lotus produces the most beautiful flower."
         The poppy yields a mere intoxicant.
         Two: "... son of Melqart ...". Googled "Amilcar", just to prove I'm paying attention.
         Three: "... tin woodsman." The only one of the Gale party not to succumb, he was overtaken by panic. Hmm ...
         Four: straw man? Rhetorically, a "straw man" is a false issue designed to lead the argument away from a true resolution.
         Five: cowardly lion? Fear, the universal bane of the mammal; Man being the only one capable of confronting it.
         Six: Dorothy? Innocence, and the gallantry so empowered.
         Regarding each of these characters as a value to be substituted into the Amilcar "equation" changes the outcome in kind.
         It never before occurred to me to analyze The Wizard of Oz in universals. Google "analysis wizard of oz". Baum's most popular work has been adopted to argue the gold standard and politics overall. This strikes me as sophistry, the perversion of logic to justify an end.
         Let's you, me and Amilcar go have a round of lotus martinis.
         Live long and publish, Beholden
         For notes on formatting, spelling and punctuation: "Note: I have begun to write boilerplate language in..."
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