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| runoffscribe's O N S T he penny drops, the parts mesh and the prize drops into the chrome cup.This is a nice little clockwork scene, with an intriguing bit of territory left open between the what and the why. In the getting from there to here, there is art in holding the surprise until the end. Confining one's characters to dialogue while eliciting a story is a demanding specification. It is a more difficult task than it seems in this piece. The text is a very good job of reflecting the setting and the plot in the dialogue without making the characters nudge and wink at the reader. Behind the simple chatty tone, we get all of the information we need to assemble the story in mind. Sound lesson, with examples. Thanks, Teach'! The intriguing bit -- why does character One (Renfield?) choose to sit and drop a penny on character Two (Al Bundy?)? Is it a perverse joke? A dare? An invitation? A warning ... Damn! Ran out of question marks. Live long and publish, Angus. For notes on formatting, spelling and punctuation: "Note: I have begun to write boilerplate language in..."
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