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 Ordeals of a stammerer  [E]
He is a shy stammerer, ashamed of this, tries to fight it, but ends up battling fear.
by Innocent/ebuka
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Innocent/ebuka!
For such a short piece, this really says a lot about who people who stutter/stammer or have a hard time speaking to an audience, and I can totally relate to it.
You don’t come out and say, but I get the feeling your character is talking about being in school, and they’ve been doing time after time because they’re constantly going to new schools due to their family moving all the time.
That’s a hard thing for a kid, especially a young one. Being the ‘new kid in school’ is rough, having to make new friends and adjusting to new surroundings. It’s hard enough for some to get up in front of a crowd, even when it’s their friends, let alone when you’re trying to do it in front of people you hardly even know!
I know! Been there, done that!
I like how wrote this in the first person as you try to prepare yourself for this frightening task, and it really shows.
Well done, Innocent/ebuka!
I did spot a couple of tiny niggles, but considering the style you wrote this in, I really don’t think they even matter. It’s more of a ‘free-style’ form, anyway.
“you screwed it again(.)"
‘God(,) must I always do this,’
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you’re going to love it here!
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