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Crustbin Thistlebum  [E]
An unwilling fairy becomes a hero and ruins his life
by Ned
Review by runoffscribe
Rated: E | (5.0)
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love the concept that even supernatural people are just people.
         Crustbin Thistlebum is a simple maker trying to find his way in a world of rules devised by takers and fakers. NordicNoir explores his character and his world faithfully, entirely through his eyes. I found it natural to identify with this protagonist and the petty plagues piled upon him.
         Mechanically, this writer is wholly competent. This is a contest entry, and so liable to deadline-itis. I did find the oddest fault -- a sentence fragment to be repaired by removing a single word:

Twenty teeth in every kid’s mouth that went to waste for centuries before the fairies began collecting them for road construction material.

         I found a few gritty nits -- one conflict in tenses and the inevitable "Comma here?" When a reviewer has bored down to this layer, it's time to quit.
         To quit, except to say that this is a very nice little piece of comedy, solid in structure and smooth in finish. After I rated it a five, I dug around in my desk drawer, found a little gold stick-on star, cut it in half and pasted that in a lower corner of my monitor.
         Live long and publish, NordicNoir.
         For notes on formatting, spelling and punctuation: "Note: I have begun to write boilerplate language in..."
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