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         Review for entry/chapter: "Wonder" 
Review by ruwth
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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May God bless both of us as we grow as writers together!


"I Write in 2019"  has me reviewing your item today! *Wink*

I thought I would return the favor since you kindly reviewed "A Birthday Gift..."  as your extra review.

Until I opened your poem, I forgot that Tinker is Judi. As soon as I saw your name, I expected a good read! I was not disappointed.

Title:

"Wonder" is the perfect title. The double meaning of the word (the wonder of the universe and the idea of I wonder about this or that) makes it ideal.

The Main Course:

I love the contrast in the two stanzas reflecting the different aspects of the word wonder. I would like the scene to be a bit more developed in the second stanza—I assume we are looking at the lights on someone's boat.

There is one line I don't personally care for. The cool breeze skimming limbs.

I like the way the two words sound alike: skim/limb but as I think of the cool air blowing gently over my arms and legs, I find myself wanting different words.

Summary:

Anyways, apart from those two words, I love your words choices. I find the first stanza mesmerizing and the second somewhat abruptly changing the scene and bringing me back to earth.

I really hope you intended to create these two views because I love that you did! *Smile*



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