Hi A.J. Ellenberger,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker will get even deeper into Sap trafficking. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a young person who gets acquainted with the production and trafficking of illegal drugs. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)and as a dealer, that meant I was doing exceptionally well for myself as an orphaned 17 year old who lived on the streets.-There should be a comma after "and".

2)So needless-There should be a comma after "So".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.