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Surprise!  [18+]
A The Taboo Words Contest Entry
by Mastiff
Review of Surprise!  
Review by Kit_Carmelite
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. It definitely fits the flash fiction genre, especially with the surprise ending. When she said: “... left for a while...”, I was thinking they were separated and she wasn’t yet accepting it. I liked the “target” analogy about how well the gifts suited her desire. The repetition of “dragging up to my room” at the end was a great way to end the piece. Really well done!
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