Hello Kit_Carmelite ,

What a lovely poem you have crafted here!

You did a great job with the prompt phrases and words and I think you have a good chance of winning the Writer's cramp with it and wish you every success!

I thoroughly enjoyed reading your beautiful personal poetic tribute to God's eternal Kingdom/heaven.

Your poem is well done, flows nicely and evoked positive feelings in me as I read it.

I liked your poem's message.


My favorite part was the last stanza:
"I yearn for the land where I should be
And where I’ll dwell in endless joy
The land where mercy consumes regret
And healing light redeems remorse"

What I loved most overall was your beautiful heart for God. You inspire me!

I liked how you structured your poem.

In the spirit of helpfulness, I have just one small suggestion. Please take it if it serves you and ignore it if it doesn't. In the first stanza, you have a period at the end. It's the only punctuation I noticed in the whole poem. My personal recommendation is that you either delete it (easiest) or add punctuation where appropriate in the rest of the poem so the grammar is consistent. This didn't take away from my enjoyment of your poem though.


Thank you for sharing your beautiful poem with the writing.com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!

May God bless you and all you write and do!
PWheeler






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