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Hello, Hullabaloo.
This is pretty dark piece, and unfortunately it ended on a sad note. I realize the irony of you hanging your dreams and wishes on a deciduous tree instead of an evergreen, meaning that the cruel voice was making a joke of you, but it almost seems like that was meant as dark humor. I don’t know if that was the way you wanted to be or the way you wanted the voice to mean it, but I’m just saying.
Either way, it is pretty ironic.
Another thing was the emotional roller coaster you took us on (OK, I’m sure your character was on the same roller coaster!). You start out being so despondent and hopeless, and the next moment your spirits are high as the voice gives you hope with that ‘insane’ suggestion, and then finally you watch your dreams wither and die.
And all in less than 300 words!
Well done, Hullabaloo!
Kee ponw ritin gon, good luck in the contest, and have a great day!

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