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 Bad Luck for Linda  [E]
Daily Flash Fiction Challenge: Linda meets Ms. Grater for the first time.
by R. Engels
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, R.Engels!
For a short FF piece, this isn't bad. I like the idea of Linda sneaking into Ms. Grater's garden and exploring that shed, only to find out Ms. Grater might not be just an innocent neighbor. *Smirk2*
I just wish you had more words to use so you could have had a little better (and longer) ending.
On a side note, I used to enter this contest a lot, so here's a little hint: I know for a fact that the owner and judge, Arakun the Twisted Raccoon is big fan of twisted/surprise endings, so you might want to keep that in mind if you enter this contest again.
Great spelling and grammar, the descriptions were excellent.
'goose-bumpy' *Laugh*
'a small, broken-down shed was barely holding on to its frame' (nice line!)
On a side note, I read your port intro and bio, and I see that you've got a lot of writing experience. Good luck with your manuscripts! I'll try to check out some of your other stories if I get a chance, but for now...
Kee ponw ritin gon, R.Engels, and welcome to WdC! Since you like to write, I know you're going to love it here!
PS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

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