Howdy, Linda! This isn’t bad, but it seemed a little rushed in terms of grammar. I like the premise of these kid breaking into the teacher’s office to retrieve a cartoon one of them didn’t want seen, only to be foiled by the cops at that last moment. I also like the irony that the teacher was also the kid’s father! Would that help as an excuse for breaking and entering? Heck, it couldn’t hurt! The spelling was good, and you did a nice job with the prompt phrase, but you were missing a few commas (and one exclamation point): "Turn the flashlight on(,) don't let it shine on any of the windows.” “...here we are(,) let's go...” "Turn the flashligh on(,) don't let it shine...’ " Nice joke(,) turn on the flashlight." "I can't(,) the batteries are dead." "Run(,) it's the police’ "Young men(!) Stop! I said, Stop!" Some of those comma could actually be periods since some of the phrases are sentences by themselves. Otherwise, well done! Kee ponw ritin gon, Linda, and have a spooktacular day!
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