Hi Cara,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of astonishment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has a sudden experience which changes their out look completely. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.