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Review #4506876
Viewing a review of:
Wheel of Fortune  [18+]
My blog--I pull a card--if it doesn't speak to me...perhaps it is for you?
by ridinghhood-p.boutilier
         Review for entry/chapter: "September 23, 2019" 
Review of Wheel of Fortune  
Review by Choconut
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi ridinghhood-p.boutilier ,

I am reviewing this on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" . It is also part of "I Write in 2019" .

Please remember these views are purely my own and any advice is given with the sole intention of being helpful.

First Impressions: Wow. I love this. For a short poem with so few words, you create fantastic imagery. It's really impressive. This is so intriguing. Firstly, I had to google the tarot card to which you refer. It's a really cool picture and, while I do not know the card's meaning, I imagine you have described it pretty well in this poem. I wondered what the contest prompt was. I assume it was the word dilatory, as this is bolded, but your description of the card at the end made me question this. It would be good to know which contest it was entered into.

Voice/Tone: The voice is wise and all-knowing. It sounds like the voice of reason. It gives the poem a soothing feeling.

Mechanics: This is free verse. I love how you have split the lines. Each one is a thought on its own, yet they all come together to make the overall poem. The way you carry the image of water flowing right through to the end is really nice. It feels like a poem that was well-thought-out.

My Favourite Part: The last line! "As always, your choice." This is so positive. It reminds the reader that everything in life comes down to choices. We can love, or we can isolate. It's our choice.

Suggestions I guess the only thing I might change is the title. Personally, I would probably have called it "Choices" or, even, "Choice." But that's just my personal opinion.

I really like this poem. You have a skill for creating imagery that strikes a chord with your readers. Great work!

Keep writing!

Choconut

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