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Review by Cubby
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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A boo-ghost for reviewing.

         *Penguin* Greetings, 🌑 Darleen - QoD ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" , *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

Title
         My Existence is a great title!

My First Impression
         *Shock2* Oh my goodness! I didn't even suspect that! I wondered who this being was that no one paid attention to and yet despised. Huh. I love being surprised, so that's huge! *Bigsmile*

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         *Asteriskb* Not really typos or grammar concerns, but I did question the dialogue tags in paragraphs 4-7. For instance, I personally, would not cap They after the quotations. But I'll leave that up to you. *Bigsmile*

Other Suggestions
         *Asteriskv* None whatsoever! Excellent piece! And best of luck in the contest!

Thoughts/Emotions
         *Asterisko* So I was wondering... who was Death's mother? And how did s/he get this job in the first place? *Facepalm* I figured since s/he had had a mom, s/he must've been human at one time, so really... I'm just curious! *Bigsmile* When I began to read The Book Thief, I did not realize at the beginning that it was Death who was the narrator. I almost stopped reading it because it creeped me out so much, but then I sort of accepted it and actually, it was an awesome book.

         *Starb* My favorite line...
                             I cannot bear the torture of this constant situation in which I find myself having to deal with the darkest ugliness of this world.

*Penguin* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Penguin*

*Fisho* Have a great day and *Fishb*
K e e p on W r i t i n g !
~Cubby ")
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