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*Delight* Hi Roseille! I am happy to review your poem in "I Write in 2019."


*Salute* Wow! This is an amazing free verse expression with so many vivid images flowing through a mind. I could really get the idea of expressing important feelings: love.

*Heart*I was drawn into the reflection and had to keep reading. Your use of instances of alliteration, assonance and consonance assist the flow and pace. I liked the notion of "paint my throat red" and the simile of "paper boats" and the central line by itself: "Words are the wrong language of love" is evocative. *Star* I like "tumble, fumble-fingered"! Brilliant. *Smile* The query in the middle verse is effective in further engaging me into understanding the poet's struggle.

*Fairy2* Your punctuation helped in reading to understand and get the dramatic effect. The dashes were well placed. I wondered about adding some pause in verse 2, lines 7,8,9 for clarity. *Think*

*Tulipy* I so appreciate this style of verse and its emotional potency. It is evocative and one could stay to ponder its depth. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. *Starstruck*

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