Well, here I am again, I'm going to have to read this novel when it is finished. But for now, I am reviewing for I Write.

As I said in my last review, I know nothing about writing novels. I can only comment as a reader. I saw nothing technically wrong however the development of the character did strike me as rushed after "Wait I did." Before I was in "her" skin, I felt what she felt. After those words, it was if someone was giving me the cliff note version.

I have no way to fix it other than to take more time, let the reader see her make physical changes. She also went from an innocent nerdy girl with a crush, who I could empathize with to calculating, vindictive, mean bitch who I had no connection with.

I still enjoyed reading your page.

~~Tink



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .