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 |  | The Nostalgia Season  [E] The Holiday season  |
| (4.5)| Hi, Prosperous Snow celebrating ! Overall +/- :My thoughts on the piece as a whole... Hello! I'm honored to drop in and read your work as part of WDC Power Reviewers' Member-to-Member Raid and as a fellow participant in "I Write"! I had to wonder, when I saw the title, what you meant by the "Nostalgia Season," and it led me to click on the work and read your poem twice over. I love poems that create a mood that allows me to inhabit a life that's not my own, and I love what this work did for me.  Rhythm & Flow:Whether freeverse or tightly-structured formal poetry, flow is paramount. This freeverse work has no set meter or rhyme I could discern, but you made excellent use of assonance (the long 'E' in Halloween/Trick-or-Treat) and occasional surprise rhyme (aroma/Oklahoma) to create a smooth flow. The lines read smoothly. Language & Word Choice:Because poetry is one of the briefer art forms, every word matters. I enjoyed some of the powerful, specific examples you described, especially the descriptions of Grandmother's cookies and the specific things your brother shouted. Stunning and engaging specificity! I loved verbs like "conspire" and "merge." In a few other places, though, I wished the imagery was equally specific. You describe the aroma of autumn wind and a collage of scents and sounds, but the lack of specificity kept me from engaging with the poem. What does Autumn wind smell like? Damp decay? Pie spices? I want the sensory description that will really draw me in. Again, the poem goes vague when it describes the collage of scents and sounds, but my mind wants to be with you and hear some of them. Things I liked  :Sometimes phrases or lines jump off the page.   It's the nostalgia season, I love the meaning this takes on with your masterful language! that draw me back to Blackwelland my Grandparents' house. I love when the end of a poem lands just right and tugs the heartstrings. This absolutely did. I never had grandparents to bake with (both parents were estranged from their extended family, for good reason), but this makes me feel like I did. It makes me feel a nostalgia I've never experienced, and I think that'a a testament to your writing! Suggestions:Take them with a grain of salt. Because I am greedy for imagery, I'd love some more specific language in the places I mentioned above, but nothing jumped out at me, otherwise. In Closing:Any final thoughts... A beautiful poem! Thank you for giving me the opportunity to be transported into the "Nostalgia Season" with you! Write On!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 10/13/2019 @ 4:34pm EDT