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I Write In 2019   [13+]
Lots of creative pursuits in 2019.
by 💙 Carly
         Review for entry/chapter: "Specters Rise" 
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Ghost**Delight* Hiya Carly! I am happy to review your piece from the "I Write in 2019" forum.

*Ghost* I was drawn into the tale in your vivid first verse with its easy flow and descriptive setting! I enjoyed the consistent rhyme scheme and eerie vibe. "demise" and"disguise" and "facade" and "fraud" are effective choices! The qualities and intents of these specters are clearly revealed to give the readers warning. The suggestion to hide inside makes sense.

*Ghost*It was fun to read and while the rhyme, assonance and consonance added to the flow and pace, I noted that the rhythm was not always even. It did not detract from the read though Lines 7 and 10 felt off when I read it aloud as they are longer lines than others in the verses. *Wink* I wondered too if "slave" should be "slaves" as in keeping with the plural "they". *Think*

*Ghost* Your response to the prompt picture is effective. I like your creative vision of the specters, and that they take the not so smart or those who lie to themselves. Cool.

*Star*Good luck in the contest. Write on!

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