Hello! I found your story on at Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and I hope you find this feedback useful.


- Overall Impression:
I did enjoy enjoy reading this piece and it is a nature's beauty that makes it nice. I just never thought being in the mountains, I could see nature like squirrels 🐿 or birds 🦢. It's nice to see everything that has a natural beauty.


- Hook:
When I read your poem, I picture myself being in nature like the desert or mountains because its all around us. It did hook me to the last word. I have to say, you did a good job on writing this.


- Style and Voice:
I would say this to you, you got style. I like the poem and you have the voice for it.


- Scene/Setting:
I can picture this in the desert because that's when you can see true nature besides the mountains and I've gone to the desert and I have seen some animals and birds that are from the desert. If you ever come out to the west coast, go to the desert and you will see what I'm talking about.


- Characters: NONE



- dialogue:
I think it was smooth as far as your dialogue and it was good so I like the dialogue.


- Grammar and Mechanics:
NONE


- Suggestions:
The one thing you forgot to do is let your picture show because I didn't see the picture. You need to fix that.



Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!


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