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Review #4511943
Viewing a review of:
Snow's Writing for 2019, 2020, & Beyond  [13+]
This book holds the items for the contest I enter in 2019, 2020, and beyond.
by Prosperous Snow celebrating
         Review for entry/chapter: "Week 22: Little Willies (or Ruthless Rhymes) Halloween Prank" 
Review by Cubby
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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center}A boo-ghost for reviewing.

Greetings, Prosperous Snow celebrating ! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2019" . *Smile* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Bursto**Ghost**Bursto*
What a fun poetry form for Halloween! Sometimes it's just plain pleasurable to write something a little on the ruthless side. *Laugh* As long as it doesn't hurt anyone's feelings, of course. So these Little Willie/Ruthless Rhymes are quite entertaining. *Whistle*

*Ghost* Boo-boos*Wind*
         *Tack* Could not scare up any typos!
         *Tack* Just a humble suggestion, but you might consider omitting the commas at the end of lines 1 and 3 as they aren't really necessary. *Smile* You also might want to consider replacing the comma in line 2, with a period. Then you would have two flowing sentences broken into two lines each. It's up to you, of course. *Wink*

*Ghost* Goodies *Jackolantern*
         *Candy6* Love the bouncy meter!
         *Candy5* Perfect rhyme!
         *Candy8* Very entertaining!
         *Candy7* You followed all the form requirements. *Smile*

*Ghost* Chillin' & Thrillin'*Moon*
         *Wolf* Favorite...
                   *Wolf*caused her tongue to blister.

*Burstv**Ghost**Burstv*
Great job!

*Cat* Have a great day and...*Cat2*
*Jackolantern*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Jackolantern*

Cubby ")
Ghost House Simply Positive signature.

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