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Review #4513100
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 First poem  [E]
When is a first effort good enough?
by Applebrush
Review of First poem  
Review by Past Member 'blimprider'
Rated: E | (5.0)
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         Good morning, Applebrush , and welcome to WdC.
         For the record, my real name is Jack Tyler, and I am a former steampunk author who has transitioned to horror, but I try to review a wide variety of styles and genres. While I have a few books in print, I am neither a famous author nor a renowned critic. I'm just a guy with an opinion that I'm here to share, and if you disagree with anything I say here, remember that the only opinion that matters is yours. Before I pitch in, allow me to offer a suggestion: Put a little of yourself into your bio sections. You will receive much more tailored reviews if your reviewer knows a little about your background and experience level.

         So, now to review a work of 44 words. This would be easier if it were 4400 words, but there is still a story of sorts, and mechanics, so I'll give it a go.
         The story, to use the term loosely, is of words banding together to form a story. Told in the form of free verse, it has a strange beauty to it, like that person who isn't drop-dead gorgeous, yet somehow keeps attracting your eye. Zen-like in its simplicity and its depth. I like it.
         Mechanics is what I call the combination of spelling, grammar, all those annoying little things that authors generally hate talking about, yet are so important in their ability to yank a reader out of his all-important immersion. I find no errors here. Every word is correct in spelling and meaning, and the complete lack of capitalization and punctuation fits perfectly, contributing to its overall meditative feel. This is relaxing and thought-provoking at the same time. It's a beautifully executed piece, and I tip my begoggled patrol cap in your direction. Thank you for sharing!

         Now, if you'll allow me, I'll share a shameless plug for a forum I just started. If these brief yet meaningful pieces are a staple of your craft, may I suggest a visit to

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No obligation, but you may just find it to be right up your alley.

Read well, and write better,
*Ghost* Jack

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